Sunday, January 25, 2009

stalingrad

mother motherland
billows across the hilltop;
flasks crack underfoot

One Single Impression
: If Only I Had Time

15 comments:

  1. A very clever, symbolically dramatic haiku! I loved its power so much that I read it over several times!

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  2. I hear the crack, feel the debis under my feet.

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  3. I fell the longing to be there in this piece.

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  4. I tell you this Kithouse, you send me to the dictionary, and when I land there, it's like traveling around the world while sitting in front of my computer ... now that to me, is refreshing. I love learning about new places and things, as it awakening my imagination.

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  5. I know less about the history of this reference than I suppose I should, so I must take the poem completely on it's own terms - and am intrigued by visual images I come up with, as well as the alliterative 'rhyme'

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  6. Kitehorse,
    I felt a sadness as I read your poem without knowing exactly why so I went to my Search...I saw the Mother Motherland statue and read of the horrible battle which took so many lives and was a turning point in WW11.
    Small on words but huge on lesson---I like your poem

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  7. ..on whose side is time_the difference between victory and defeat..many thanks..

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  8. In or out of context, this haiku lends a vision, another vision, and a wide band of melancholy.

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  9. Once again, another haiku that evokes strong emotion, image, and sound.

    I am constantly amazed how you also are able to pull so much more from others works -- case in point, what a shock to the system to see your reference to Queen's lyrics to 39 on my time haiku. A lovely coincidental connection for me to savor.

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  10. Wonderful haiku! The images made me sad with a undertone of hope, if only.

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  11. if only you had time, you would linger or fix history?

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  12. a beautiful 'ku.. we never realize how much we love home until it is lost...

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  13. Hmm..considered to be the bloodiest battle in human history..and for the short ammount of time too. Very good but sobering.

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  14. sad, but well-done haiku
    good personification, too

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  15. It's a place I long to visit someday..I hope sooner than later!

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