Saturday, June 30, 2012

nearly so

Haiku Heights #151: True

In this week's Haiku Heights prompt, Leo the meme editor, inspired by poets Rita and Grace, is asking us to be more true to the haiku form. In this case the true form is said to be showing an image, rather than telling it. Now there must be a hundred and one opinions on how to write true haiku. It's a lot like gardening, where everyone has an opinion on the right way to nourish a flowering shrub. "Show, don't tell" is one of those cast-iron tropes of creative writing in general, not just for haiku. But I am a reasonable meme follower and so I'll see how my haiku comes out -- but though I'm the author, I disclaim responsibility for any unintended consequences which may follow...
morgueFile mensatic
gibbous moon runs true
straining towards full roundness
with a sallow glow
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11 comments:

  1. Vinay Leo R.June 30, 2012 at 12:06 PM

    :) the moon phases... it seems a slow march towards the fullness, and then an even more slower march to nothingness.

    Bruce, I mean no offence to you or every haijin who share at the blog.. I just meant to say any 17 syllables over 3 lines isn't always a haiku. Perhaps my musing went a little long.

    Thank you for sharing a haiku with us each week.

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    1. Bruce MillerJuly 1, 2012 at 11:13 AM

      Thanks for providing a great place for us to share our haiku and thoughts!

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  2. carol l mckennaJune 30, 2012 at 2:02 PM

    lovely nature haiku ~ ...gibbous moon runs true' .....great line ~ thanks, ^_^ (A Creative Harbor)

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  3. joanneJune 30, 2012 at 2:19 PM

    cool pic, and a haiku that 'runs true' (at least in my opinion!)

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  4. PranitaJune 30, 2012 at 3:10 PM

    Beautiful haiku... :) I like the usage of the moon's phases! Sweet... The picture s very interesting!
    Dew drops of the Dawn.

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  5. Emily RoeslyJune 30, 2012 at 8:06 PM

    Very descriptive with lots of imagery. Loved it!

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    1. Bruce MillerJuly 1, 2012 at 11:11 AM

      Thanks for providing the spectacular photo for this haiku in your morgueFile.com portfolio.

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  6. Sri ValliJuly 1, 2012 at 5:51 AM

    Very thoughtful haiku and beautiful picture!

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  7. GeraldineJuly 1, 2012 at 12:12 PM

    I like this a lot. And good advice too...

    New contest now on:

    http://www.myreallifereviews.com/2012/07/mrlr-july-ice-cream-lovers-contest-and.html

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  8. Amrit SinhaJuly 4, 2012 at 4:02 PM

    Is it about the different shapes of moon? Lovely work !!!

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  9. NAWALJuly 5, 2012 at 1:06 PM

    Lovely haiku :) thoughtful write up :)

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